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In honour of veelainc's 3000th member, I present my burnt offering, and I mean burnt: here is an old (OLD) draft of what was to be a part of the rewrite of my first ever fic, Haven. I edited it up a bit, got stymied by the ending so I just didn't write one, I sat all afternoon in a greasy spoon poking at this and then just sort of tossed it online. This is hardly the way to show your appreciation for a list you have sweat blood over in the last two years or so, but I hope you'll feel the love just the same. Because my love is pure and true.

Title: Breathe, or Origins 19/Haven 1
Rating: R
Pairing: Harry/Draco
A/N: exclusively posted to veelainc. Sorry!

For the members of veelainc, my deepest love and affection.

( Origins 19: Breathe )

Date: 2003-06-13 04:11 pm (UTC)
ext_14294: A redhead an a couple of cats. (chickens)
From: [identity profile] ashkitty.livejournal.com
*clings*

Ivy, I love you.

Also, as today is my one-year anniversary in HP fandom and I have not the time or creativity currently to write something to give, I'll just nab this as a present of sorts and skulk off with it, all right? *grins*

God, but I missed this story.

*adores*

Date: 2003-06-13 04:22 pm (UTC)
ext_22302: (whee!)
From: [identity profile] ivyblossom.livejournal.com
HAPPY ANNIVERSARY! It's yours if you want it. Hehehhehee.

*loves you*

I missed this story too.

Date: 2003-06-13 04:52 pm (UTC)
ext_14294: A redhead an a couple of cats. (bed)
From: [identity profile] ashkitty.livejournal.com
Mine!

*grabs fic and skulks off to add it to hoarde of other claimed Ivyfics*

Hee!

Date: 2003-06-13 06:01 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] mark356.livejournal.com
I'll be 18 on the 21st; I'll read these as soon as I finish OoTP, I promise!

Date: 2003-06-14 07:47 am (UTC)
ext_22302: (Default)
From: [identity profile] ivyblossom.livejournal.com
oooo you are so very young. Ah to be young. *holds lower back*

Date: 2003-06-13 08:15 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] zionsstarfish.livejournal.com
Absolutely gorgeous. I may have forgotten to breathe at several points during the story, it was so beautiful.

Date: 2003-06-14 07:48 am (UTC)
ext_22302: (Default)
From: [identity profile] ivyblossom.livejournal.com
Aww thanks honey. *hugs*

Date: 2003-06-14 07:48 am (UTC)
ext_22302: (Default)
From: [identity profile] ivyblossom.livejournal.com
HAHAHAHHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAAA!!!!

And look how it's mostly even PG-13 rated. Go me!

Date: 2003-06-14 04:57 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] maruchina.livejournal.com
Oooh. I've always wondered about Harry's point of view in that scene. It's just beautiful. *sigh*

It's also really hard to accept this is the end of it. Sure you're not going to rewrite Haven... ever? *hopeful*

Date: 2003-06-14 07:49 am (UTC)
ext_22302: (whee!)
From: [identity profile] ivyblossom.livejournal.com
Well...

It's a long story. I am and I'm not. I mostly am. It just won't look like this. Confusing, long story. LOL

But thanks a lot. *loves*

Re:

Date: 2003-06-14 10:32 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] maruchina.livejournal.com
LOL that icon still cracks me up.

Anyway, it's fantastic you're going to continue it in some way! Every form of Cicatrix-Draco is great.

Date: 2003-06-15 07:12 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] catiadoodle.livejournal.com
Awww...

Lovely. Just lovely.

But eventually Draco moves; he pulls a handkerchief out of his pocket and wipes off his hand and then Harry's. It seems like the most mundane thing to do, to sponge off the evidence of this odd entanglement, clean himself of Harry's premature pleasure with scrunched up piece of cloth. For a moment, Harry remembers that he hates Draco Malfoy.

I loved how you didn't make everything perfect. This gesture, and Harry's awkward moments when he turns his head and can't look at Draco added to the beauty of this chapter.

I also loved Harry's first reaction to the kiss. Defensive and cautious, almost accusatory. We know Draco is in fact really desperate, but Harry doesn't know that...
It also seems more realistic for Harry to recognize his mysterious aurora borealis kisser only with the second kiss, and not from the after taste of the first like in Origins 18.

Sorry I can't say anything more constructive right now...

*wibble*

Date: 2003-06-15 12:32 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] aldiara.livejournal.com
Awwwwww, I love it! ::snuffles:: Beautiful as ever!

Breathe

Date: 2003-06-25 07:19 pm (UTC)
ext_1059: (Default)
From: [identity profile] shezan.livejournal.com
Oh, yummy. I just love bits like

If Harry has imagined kissing Draco Malfoy before, which, he has to admit, he has on occasion, sitting in potions class, or waiting for dinner to be served, it would always have to be forceful, unforgiving, involving blood and begging and pain. It would never be nice, never sweet, never gentle and careful and tender and cautious. Until now Harry imagined that Draco would
be harsh and hard, he would press himself into you the way he pressed himself into the world, the way he walked into a room and assumed dominance.


A present just to be on Veelainc? How good can things get?

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